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Two-pass editing: compress 50% preserving all claims, expand key paragraph with analogy and example.
Apply two opposing editing passes to the provided text. The goal is to reveal its structural DNA—what it relies on, what it wastes, and what it leaves underdeveloped. PASS 1 — COMPRESS TO 50% Cut to exactly half length while preserving every factual claim: - Remove all hedges: 'very', 'really', 'quite', 'somewhat'. If the claim is true, state it. If not always true, specify the condition instead of hedging. - Collapse stacked modifiers: pick one intensifier. 'Extremely important and critically significant' → choose one. - Convert passive to active: 'was decided by the committee' → 'the committee decided'. Expose agency. - Merge redundant pairs: 'each and every', 'first and foremost', 'various different'. - Split compound sentences: more than one 'and' probably means two ideas. Flag lost nuance with [bracketed notes]. PASS 2 — EXPAND KEY PARAGRAPH 2× Pick the single most important paragraph. Double its length without fluff by adding: - An analogy from a different domain: 'This is like suspension bridge load distribution—except the load is cognitive.' Test: does it map ≥3 structural points? - A specific named example with real metrics: 'Slack tried this in 2019. Within 3 months, engagement changed by X.' - A counterpoint and refutation: 'A common objection is X. However, this assumes Y, which fails because Z.' - A sensory detail: what would you see on a dashboard, hear in a meeting, feel as a user? EDITORIAL NOTE One paragraph analyzing what the passes revealed: the original's over-reliance on hedges, the underdeveloped core idea, the implicit audience assumption. OUTPUT: 1. Compressed version (50%) 2. Expanded paragraph (2×) 3. Editorial note.
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